It looks like a pretty solid pale ale to me.
One thing I can suggest about using recipes out of a magazine, or any where else for that matter. You can change them according to your experience with brewing and ingredients. Or you can brew them using the recipe to a tee, and then change it to your preference the next time you brew it. Any recipe, no matter who designs it may require some tweaking to get it where you like it. Keep tweaking it till you get it perfect--and then, tweak it again to learn even more about ingredients/processes etc.