That is the most black patent and chocolate malt I've ever seen in a recipe. I don't think the chocolate is a problem, but the black patent could be a roasted punch in the face. Things I'd think about - Use some caraffa (which is debittered) in place of some black patent (and ask yourself if you really need that much roast, maybe you do, I don't know). Mix up the crystal with a couple different crystal types for complexity - the different L-levels have different flavors from light caramel to raisiny. Maybe 0.7 lbs 40L, 0.7lbs 80L, 0.2lbs 120L.
Chances are that steeping won't fully extract the sugars from the grains. Any calculated percentages will be based on ideal extraction, not reality, so I wouldn't worry about the percentages. Be prepared for a slightly lower than predicted OG.
Possibly more important than the recipe details - pitch plenty of yeast in this beer.